Feedback from treatment

 In this post, I will be recording the feedback I received after pitching our two full treatments to our classroom teacher and our production teacher. We pitched our first treatment as its our strongest idea and most likely to be used. 

Regarding the casting, we were advised to cast three very obviously different looking independent and confident girls, who can play instruments, ideally bass, electric guitar and drums. The lead singer needs to be charismatic and suitable to be a performer who can play guitar and also sing well. This is to make sure it doesn't look like the actors are lip syncing but actually performing. By creating each girls own independent image, it means that the audience can appeal to their favorite girl, this will help promote the band. 

Our two concepts were approved, the graffiti connotes a rebellious feel to the music video which contrasts with our opening scene in a dollhouse, barbie, and very stereotypical girly pink theme which is the opposite of the girl band. We decided with our teachers to only use two locations to save time. Our teachers suggested to shoot the whole band performance in the opening within the barbie dollhouse in order to maximise the set. 

In the opening of the music video, we came up with the idea of the three girls wearing long, prom dress style dresses to adheres to the typical girly stereotype, from this our original idea was to wreck their dresses with paint and spray paint and completely destroy the girly sterotopye as they dress how they want to. However, as it might take a few times to shoot the first shots in the dresses before their wrecked, we are going to buy similar dresses which they will change into during the rebellious, wreck-less scenes. 

So that we dint't need toi build a third set, our teachers advised that we film the band trashing, destroying and throwing paint around the second set. This will then act as our third set ince it is damaged.

Our four targets to improve our pitch is to cast a strong, confident, charismatic lead singer which the camera can mainly focus on instead of filming close ups of all three all of the time. WE need to ensure that we do cast three unique looking girls who all contrast a different style to the others. Also to maximise the barbie first set, we can use the space to film the whole band performing instead of just the one main singer. We will also go out of our way to buy similar dresses to the opening scene which we will rip, paint on and destroy for the costume change where they reveal their own identity and style. This will save time on the set and give us more time for filming.